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面的全部内容；表达基本清楚；但结构与用词错误较多，有少数是严重错误；长度符合要求。 Sample 7, Sample 8 给分：（ 5— 8分） 评语：内容切题，包括题中所列要点；语句尚可理解，但结构与用词错误多；有些是严重错误；长度基本符合要求。 Sample 9, Sample 10 给分：（ 1— 4分） 评语：与题意勉强有关，但条理不清，不成篇章；语句错误多且严重；词不达意。 （ 注： 文章长度低于 180词扣 1分，低于 170分扣 2分，依 次类推。 ） (1) Among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is probably the noblest. It is of the utmost importance to the human beings, Everybody not only needs love, but also should give love. As is described in the picture, love is a lamp which is brighter in darker places. This is indeed true. People in darker places need more light than ordinary people. Maye even a dim light can give them much hope for a better life and progress. Maybe just a thread of light will call forth their strength and courage to step out of their difficulties. For instance when someone is starving to death, just a little food and water from you may save his life. Or when a little girl in a poor rural area drops out of school because of poverty, just a small surn of money from you may support her to finish her schooling and change her life, you have given love which is like a lamp in a dark place where light is most needed. So to sum up, we should offer our help to all who are in need. We expect to get love from others and we also give love to others so when you see someone in difficulty or in distress and in need of help, don39。 t hesitate to give your love to him. I believe then the ralationship between people will be harmonious and our society will be a better place for us to live in. （ 20分） 中国最庞大的下资料库 (整理 . 版权归原作者所有 ) 第 9 页 共 36 页 (2) It is generally believed that love is a hot topic which is most talked about. This is true not only in China but also in other countries. We live in different countries, speak different languages, but love is something mon to us all. But how to show love may be different with different people in different countries. This is something we should give more thought to. As shown in the picture, love is like a lamp which shines brightest in dark places. This tells us a simple truth: Love is lika a lamp. It is most valuable when it is most needed. For example, once I saw a foreign lady get lost in the street. She could not speak Chinese and nobody seemed to be able to help her. Though my English is not very good and I am a shy person, I thougth she needed help very much. I asked her what she wanted. She told me she lost her way, so I showed her the way to her hotel. It was a small thing but she thanked me very much because my help was needed very much. My help was like a lamp in a dark place. I think we all should be like a lamp in a dark place, showing our love, giving our help to others, even to strangers. In this way we can make this world a harmonious and peaceful world.（ 18分） (3) I saw a picture recently in your newspaper. There is a small lamp in the picture and a flame on the lamp, which is smiling. The lamp says, Love is a lamp, it will be brightest in the darkest place. I think it shows us a vivid picture: Where and who need live, love is the noblest feeling. So I believe that we should give our love to those who are in need. If everyone can give his love to whom in need, then the world will be filled with love. For example, in the countryside. There are millions of pupils, who can39。 t afford to attend school. Some of them never attend school. They are unfortunate, but now there are many warmhearted people who give help to the pupils. Of course, we can also show our love in many other ways. For instance. As a friend, we should help our friends when they are in trouble. There is a saying: A friend in need is a friend indeed. As a young man, we should respect the older. When we walk on the street, we can help the blind or old people and children to cross the road. In a word, There are many ways to show our love. The people all over the world should love and respect each other. The best way to show our love is to help others when they are in difficulities.（ 16 分） (4) Everyone may agree that among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is probably the noblest. But people have different understanding of it. As can be seen from the picture, there is one point of view. It says that love is like a lamp, which is brighter when the dark is heavier. This means that love should be given to where it is most needed. I agree with this point of view. Take my experience for a example. Being poor, I have to do some parttime jobs 中国最庞大的下资料库 (整理 . 版权归原作者所有 ) 第 10 页 共 36 页 to support my study in Beijing. I always feel love from other friends and families when they help me either in material or in spiritual aspects. I love them and want to give my help to other people at the same time. But some of my classmates take their parents39。 help for granted. They never try to support them by working on the side. They have no idea of difficulties in one39。 s life. Therefore, they don39。 t realize the value of love. As for the best way to show love, I think, first of all, everyone should be couraged and required to try to be selfreliant. Secondly, when one is in trouble, others should help him. Finally we should educate people to appreciate help from other people. Only in this way can our society bee a big happy family.（ 14分） (5) As is shown in the picture, we can see clearly that love is like a lamp and the darker the environment is, the brighter love is. And it is no denying that among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is the noblest. Actually, because of love, many people in trouble get help and encourage, so they will try their best to overtake the difficulty and look forward to a better future. What39。 s more, when others are in trouble, they take helping them for granted. Therefore,。